Start here:The Volcanic Eruption!
Hot lava spits down from the sky.Dark clouds surround the volcano.Trees burn and turn into ashes.I hear people in the distance screaming for help.Kids cough with fear as the smoke makes them dizzy.I stand there all alone thinking are my parents dead yet?
I hear a loud rumble.Hot lava dashes down the volcano burning anything that stops it from killing us.I run and run my heart pumps as if it going to explode.My Brain goes wild but sad at the same time.My brain is not constintrating because I can see parents crying and holding there own loved ones ashes.I run on the ashes looking back and then the parents i saw not long ago are dead too.
I run alone fighting for survival but the lava’s to fast it burns the back of my shoe.I ‘m wondering where my family is.I carrie on running and find a high place to hide.The breeze pushes me away making it hard for me to climb the mountain .I reach the mountain and never before have I been sad.Then I feel rain on me the lava starts to go away when the rain spits on earth.“Yes” I yell then it stops the lava is gone then all I see is a destroyed City.My eyes where devasted.
I hear a loud rumble.Hot lava dashes down the volcano burning anything that stops it from killing us.I run and run my heart pumps as if it going to explode.My Brain goes wild but sad at the same time.My brain is not constintrating because I can see parents crying and holding there own loved ones ashes.I run on the ashes looking back and then the parents i saw not long ago are dead too.
I run alone fighting for survival but the lava’s to fast it burns the back of my shoe.I ‘m wondering where my family is.I carrie on running and find a high place to hide.The breeze pushes me away making it hard for me to climb the mountain .I reach the mountain and never before have I been sad.Then I feel rain on me the lava starts to go away when the rain spits on earth.“Yes” I yell then it stops the lava is gone then all I see is a destroyed City.My eyes where devasted.
1 comment:
Hey Maopa
I really like the way you made your story interesting for the readers to read.
I thought that you might need to add some punctuation to you narrative.
But any way your story was awesome.
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